I’ve officially received edits back from my editor and alpha reader on Draft #2 of Cerulean Bound, so it’s time to start sharing some of the more ridiculous “edits” they’ve done.
In today’s showcase, I present to you the first and last pages of the manuscript my editor (/mother) returned to me yesterday.
Anyone have a guess on what the bread means?
Right before I sent Mom the manuscript, I reminded her of the “sandwich” approach to critiquing, which is to bookend all the “fix this” “fix that” with positive comments. I.e. the first piece of bread is positive crit, then you delve into all the stuff that needs changing (the meat of the sandwich), then end off with another piece of bread/positive crit.
Mother, bless her, took this literally. As you can see, she put actual pieces of bread into the manuscript. And, in her words, the bottom piece of bread has jam “to make it extra tasty.”
This week I will be going through her comments, as well as revisiting my alpha reader’s comments, to come up with a gameplan for fixing whatever’s broken in my book. I’ll start with big picture stuff (my alpha reader suggested adding a couple of scenes from Grashk’s perspective, which I really liked), and then deal with the nitty gritty details.
Hope everyone’s having a great week so far! Stay awesome 🙂
Michelle Proulx - Author 
I like the idea of the bread so long as it can be gluten free, toasted and covered in strawberry jam 🙂 Glad you’re making progress though and the comments are giving you something to work on.
The bread can be anything you want! I personally would like a freshly baked baguette slathered in butter. Jam is super delicious, but the simplicity of butter appeals to me in a way no other topping can.